托福大作文最佳范文——The Hazards of Moviegoing
还记得文章第一段吗?Introduction+Thesis，大家平时要按这种固定的结构多多练习。
今天我们学习第二段：
To begin with, I just don’t enjoy thegeneral hassle of the evening. Since small local movie theaters are a thing ofthe past, I have to drive for 15 minutes to get to the nearest multiplex. Theparking lot is shared with several restaurants and a supermarket, so it’s always jammed. I have to drive around in an endless line, with theconstant that tickets for the show I want will sell out. If we do get tickets,the theater will be so crowded that I won’t be able to sit with my friends, or we’ll have to sit in a front row gapping up at a giant screen. I have toshell out a ridiculous amount of money-up to 11 dollars-for a ticket. Thatentitles me to sit while my shoes seal themselves to a sticky floor coated withspilled soda, bubble gum, and crushed Raisins.
第二段同样由两个结构组成(Point+Support)。第一句是中心句，非常简单指出了不喜欢去电影院看电影的第一个原因就是不喜欢晚上的匆匆忙忙。注意写作中最最重要的结构就是：Point+Support，当你给出一个观点或一个评价，一定需要强有力的支持。这里作者说不喜欢去电影院看电影就是因为不喜欢晚上太匆忙，读到这包括我在内的很多人都不懂呀：看个电影有什么匆忙的?别急，作者进行了详尽有力的支持，用到的方法是按时间顺序列举说明：开车到最近的电影院就要15分钟，好不容易开到了又要排队等停车位又要担心票卖光了，真买到了票又不一定有合适座位，票还贵，地板还。。。这样就有理有据地解释清楚了第一个原因，大家可以模仿这种写作方法，一定要注意的是：像作者一样填充进大量的细节!
托福大作文最佳范文——The Hazards of Moviegoing
写作文最基本的结构：Point+Support
文章第三段如下：
Second, the theater offers temping snacks that I really don’t need. Like most of us, I have to battle an expanding waistline. Athome I do pretty well by simply not buying stuff that is bad for me. I can makedo with snacks like celery and carrot sticks because there is no ice cream inthe freezer. Going to the theater, however, is like spending my evening in a7-Eleven that’s been equipped with a movie screen and comfortableseats. As I try to persuade myself to just have a Diet Coke, the smell of freshpopcorn dripping with butter soon overcomes me. Chocolate bars the size ofsmall automobiles seem to jump into my hands. I risk pulling out my fillings asI chew enormous mouthfuls of Milk Duds. By the time I leave the theater, I feeldisgusted with myself.
同样，第一句是中心句，作者不喜欢去电影院看电影的第二个原因是电影院里有太多的不健康食品啦。聪明的你读完第一句，应该已经预判到往下该怎么写了吧?支持这个观点!这段作者又用到一个新方法——做对比。对比是人们使用的最强烈的表达手法，还记得每次发成绩单后，妈妈总会说，你看谁谁都考了一百分，你才八十呀!这就是对比，对比总能突出一些事情。回到段落，At home开头，作者先说自己在家吃什么呢?萝卜条和芹菜条，相当健康。Going to the theater呢?可乐呀爆米花呀巧克力的诱惑都袭来了，其中用到了夸张的写法。这么一做对比，读者就又懂了这第二个原因：嗯，确实很不健康。请大家多多模仿练习做对比的写作方法吧。
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